Arc One: 12 minutes
Arc Two: 14 minutes
Arc Three: 14 minutes
Arc Four: 12 minutes
Total: 52 minutes
Not bad, not really. Listening to it, I got a bit sleepy during certain extended passages. There will be cutting, no doubt. But certain questions ... I am getting ahead of myself.
In attendance at the reading yesterday; from the Unit - SG, DM, FS, EC & ES. From Great Lakes - Daniel and Esther, who will be designing the costumes. Andrew was unavailable, we previous believed a Monday would make him available, but as this is a holiday weekend, they could rehearse Christmas Carol on a Monday, and the director is kind of necessary there, too. However, if I were to have asked a single designer to be there, it would be the costumer. She is going to be creating more of the set than the set designer.
Terry would have been nice ... props ... but the Schubert is small and after all, this was supposed to b a Unit event, not a production meeting for GLTF.
The rehearsal on Sunday really paid off, the actors truly sold it, there was nothing about the reading about which I could point to during notes to say, "WELL ... the actors just SAID it wrong!!!"
Notes weren't difficult, anyway. Jesus, the two days I've had, I need people to stop saying nice things about me, I'll pop.
Brian really pressed the NARRATOR's earnestness, I need to keep that voice in my head as I rewrite his entreaties.
Eddie can be even looser in INTERVIEW ... "You dare?!" is a bit pennydreadful, he could say "Are you kidding?!" It is 1985, after all.
Hearing the play as a whole, FS was the first to state that the connections between scenes work, that the connections are wonderful. Several remarked that the concept works - having distinct styles between scenes, and yet having them be one complete narrative, was fun to hear, and not confusing.
Most criticism dealt with GIAOUR. FS said the language is too dense - "Poetry that hasn't been earned yet." SG commented that unlike the later pieces, there is no suspense. Just a couple of guys, what is the tension between the two of them, where does it come from? It is not clear.
ES pointed out that know we know what happens to XANTHE, perhaps her part can be enlarged, the romantic attraction can given more attention.
Brian believes it is anout the society mores of seduction - AUBREY desperately wants to seduce Xanthe the right way, but no that he has seen DARVELL's cavalier attitude, there is frustration in that. The "gaming" argument? There's no danger yet.
DM mentioned the fact that PORLOCK later says, "I loved him." Where was that in the 1st scene?
SG was concerned that people will be confused by the NOSFERATU arc ... having been pitched on actor/character switch, will are they expecting this to be a different scene? And why does Porlock become this grostesquery, it is not clear.
DM suggested LUCY's blog entries are too formal for a seventeen year-old, though ES disagreed, the Internet is where people write like that. FS: "On the Internet, no one knows you're a vampire."
Or that you aren't one, as the case may be.
I asked if it felt like I was mocking TWILIGHT. No, they agreed, TWILIGHT exists to mock convention, and I am playing off that.
Asking about the different endings, those who were familiar with it felt the "insane" narrator was more compy fun. If it is who it was in this reading ... then why? Why out yourself? Pulling a Lestat, I said. "HERE I AM! COME GET ME! IT WILL BE A GREAT WAR!"
Very heplful comments, all. A lot to think about. I may have time to work on this over the weekend, and get a clean copy to Andrew by December 1st.